Hasmukh Amathalal

Gold Star - 318,628 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

Nothing To Fight - Poem by Hasmukh Amathalal

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Nothing to fight
Under naked night
It is much to delight
And feel right

The silvery light
All objects are in sight
But you appear calm
Floating in realm

I wish
For night not to finish
As for the first time
She is with no dearth of time

I look at
And think of fate
How lucky am I?
To watch with naked eyes

She is within grasp
I smile and clap
She just hides face
I close the eye to find the trace

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Comments about Nothing To Fight by Hasmukh Amathalal

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (8/8/2014 7:18:00 PM)


    doesnt suond untrue


    someone noone4 minutes ago
    sounds in view
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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (8/8/2014 7:18:00 PM)


    It's a good poem but it could be improved


    Ella Mae2 minutes ago
    I think it's a good poem, however I think you need to create more imagery and make the poem flow a little more. The rhyming seems like you have tried to base the whole line on the word, which doesn't make the poem flow as easily.
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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (8/7/2014 8:53:00 PM)


    Nothing to fight
    Under naked night
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, August 7, 2014



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