Hasmukh Amathalal

Gold Star - 675,117 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

Brown Eyes - Poem by Hasmukh Amathalal

Brown eyes with sparkling light,
Standing before me just to right,
Inviting me near but not to fight,
May be closer views and clear sight,

I could see whole world in it,
Two eyes as if deem lamps lit,
Why sudden interest in me hit?
Muscled body with physique fit,

May not be that simple reason,
Spring all over as main season,
Flowers booming with colours different,
Invitation seemed only reason apparent,

I too was ready for open meet,
Shaking body with crumbling feet,
Not knowing what was in store?
Nothing was wrong for ground to explore,

Miss was not easy but hard nut to crack,
Little hurry was sign to pack,
Patience was must for not going back,
Attempt sincere but confidence not lack,

Both realized the gravity of situation,
It was real and not first sight or infatuation,
Time was critical and need of an hour,
Relation to grow and not sour,

Kind gesture with open invite,
Desires grew with ambition ignite,
It was not time to say good night,
Grab the opportunity as the time was right,

Soon developed intense love and bond,
Deep relations and each other fond,
Love was to succeed with ultimate marriage,
Simple arrangement and not as carriage,

All was done with ease and comfort,
Both the families had understand and rapport,
Extending good will and complete support,
Nothing was going bad as suggested report

When I look back and simply ponder?
No simple answer but only wonder,
No clouds to make loud thunder,
Simple acknowledgement with easy surrender


Comments about Brown Eyes by Hasmukh Amathalal

  • Liza Sudina (8/21/2017 1:36:00 AM)

    Brilliant poem of love to muscled body, so uplifting, with true passion and happy end! (Report)Reply

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  • Cristian Beraru (7/9/2017 6:18:00 PM)

    Well now the romance for my brown eyes grow love it, ''inviting me near but not to fight'' favourite line. (Report)Reply

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  • Subhas Chandra Chakra (4/15/2016 3:03:00 AM)

    A nice description of the inviting eyes...

    Brown eyes with sparkling light,
    Standing before me just to right,
    Inviting me near but not to fight,
    May be closer views and clear sight,

    The initial moments...
    I could see whole world in it,
    Two eyes as if deem lamps lit,
    Why sudden interest in me hit?
    Muscled body with physique fit,

    The initiation...
    Kind gesture with open invite,
    Desires grew with ambition ignite,
    It was not time to say good night,
    Grab the opportunity as the time was right,

    The final touch...

    When I look back and simply ponder?
    No simple answer but only wonder,
    No clouds to make loud thunder,
    Simple acknowledgement with easy surrender

    You have excelled in every way, dear poet.
    Many thanks for this melodious encounter.
    Made me feel embarrassed once again.
    Thanks for the poem.
    Subhas
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  • Seema Jayaraman (11/5/2015 8:35:00 PM)

    Close up on Brown eyes..love lit..thanks for sharing (Report)Reply

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  • (6/5/2015 12:10:00 AM)

    The mirror of those eyes set you apart from the start with love and a never ending journey...lovely...regards (Report)Reply

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  • Heather Wilkins (8/17/2014 7:47:00 PM)

    a beautiful poem about a pair of brown eyes (Report)Reply

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  • (7/17/2014 1:58:00 AM)

    :) falling in love with the one having brown eyes... and spending the whole life peacefully and happily...
    wow! amazing write...
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  • (7/17/2014 1:58:00 AM)

    :) falling in love with the one having brown eyes... and spending the whole life peacefully and happily...
    wow! amazing write...
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  • Mihaela Pirjol (6/22/2014 3:07:00 AM)

    I enjoyed reading this eloquent poem. I can relate to it. Thank you. (Report)Reply

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  • (10/30/2009 7:43:00 PM)

    Those brown eyes... love at first sight... everything tender and easy going... but no rush... everlasting... lovely to read... very lovely... (Report)Reply

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  • (10/14/2009 8:20:00 PM)

    i have brown eyes<3 :) i want to thank you for sharing such a beautiful, amazing poem with me... your insight is incredible, might i add...

    LOVE.

    you sir, have made me fall for your poem, it drew me in completely, great work again. praise.

    Sabrina
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  • (9/16/2009 2:00:00 PM)

    there is a reason...for making 'brown eyes blue' and the reason in your poem comes to who...sight is a pretty thing...with or without its wings...you are very good sir...very (Report)Reply

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  • Jester's P (9/14/2009 12:15:00 AM)

    i like it...brown eye are beautiful, and i have brown eyes...
    anyhow your poem is a story of life's journey seeing the world in a beautiful vision.
    nice poem
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  • (9/12/2009 8:07:00 AM)

    brown eyes are beautiful...because they are welcoming.....warm....the color of chocolate.... nice write! .....lovely (Report)Reply

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  • Mohammed Al-balushi (9/8/2009 3:24:00 AM)

    could see whole world in it, i like tis experssion, lucky girl with brown eyes (Report)Reply

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  • (8/27/2009 11:51:00 AM)

    When I look back and simply ponder?
    No simple answer but only wonder,
    No clouds to make loud thunder,
    Simple acknowledgement with easy surrender --> great

    the most eloquent languange: EYES LANGUAGE
    well done! I enjoyed it...
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  • (8/23/2009 9:49:00 AM)

    Very lucky girl who is wiih beautiful eyes (Report)Reply

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  • (8/16/2009 9:05:00 AM)

    Rich, elegant brown eyes that are moving. (Report)Reply

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  • (8/13/2009 8:34:00 PM)

    girls look beautiful with brown eyes...10 (Report)Reply

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  • (8/13/2009 8:23:00 PM)

    female get more atracted by their eyes....10 (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, June 23, 2009

Poem Edited: Monday, June 20, 2011


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