Frank James Ryan Jr (FjR)

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Point Of Submission [ Deictic Conclusions ] - Poem by Frank James Ryan Jr (FjR)

You obfuscate these events as if somehow
You have been given pontiffical judgement

Might I ask where your source of blaspheme comes
and coronates you, evolutions Incubus

Perfidation.... is the inevitable consequence
When Sun touches down.....for its epilogue
You suddenly realize....Science had it wrong

And looking up....from your dark black hole
All you see is space an' for the very first time
You wonder what or Who- made this happen

Arrogance an'obfuscation no longer sequitur
Judgement now becomes you.....and so I ask

What you think it will cost...to save your Soul
After, once......you've 'Crossed over Rubicon'

More than catharsis to earn yo'r redemption
More than a plea......to secure your salvation
Nothing less....than your point of submission



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Frank James Ryan Jr.
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Topic(s) of this poem: answers, evolution, questions, science


Poet's Notes about The Poem

Revised Version from Original posting in November of 2013.

Comments about Point Of Submission [ Deictic Conclusions ] by Frank James Ryan Jr (FjR)

  • Lantz Pierre (9/8/2017 2:09:00 AM)


    Okay, I think I got caught out on my first reading of this. Or maybe not. It's very appealing how this poem keeps itself veiled, forcing the reader to make decisions about context (as the title parenthetically suggests) . So I'll try and pull back and go for the big picture. Clearly there is deceit afoot in this poem. Deceit in a one-on-one relationship. Or what should be one-on-one. Monogamy, as it were. Or monotheism, as it may be. I've never actually contemplated the man-god relationship in terms of being a monogamous relationship, so the poem has provoked thought, and that's always a good thing. So whether the poem is addressing individuals (I have reasons to think not) or the relationship between an individual and a codified deity it brings up parallel issues that resonate and reverberate, stirring up the stagnate bottom (the one who must submit) . (Report) Reply

    Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (9/8/2017 2:38:00 AM)

    Thank You Lantz for your dissective read & acute derivations via my semi-metaphoric underlying's of which you basically nailed it spot-on...Simply put, & as a born & raised (but not exactly virtuous) Roman Catholic, the work is my besmirching snub at sciences theory on how we all became we...Nice job Chief Detective Pierre. ~FjR'17~

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Poem Submitted: Friday, September 8, 2017



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