Emily Cartmell

Pointed Toes! - Poem by Emily Cartmell

Hurry! Point your toes!
Pirouette with straight legs,
and swing with pointed toes!

Topic(s) of this poem: dance

Form: Haiku

Comments about Pointed Toes! by Emily Cartmell

  • (7/14/2016 12:56:00 PM)

    @Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon thank you! (Report) Reply

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  • Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon (7/8/2016 8:22:00 PM)

    A short but significant statement that motivates movement. Well done my young friend! (Report) Reply

  • Aries Profanisaurus (2/20/2016 2:16:00 PM)

    Am no expert on haiku but I see no problem with this piece at all. Dance is clearly important to you. (Report) Reply

  • Fabrizio Frosini (1/23/2016 1:27:00 PM)

    dear Emily, thank you so much for reading and commenting on my poem 'Nocturnal Snowing'.
    When I read your words, I couldn't remember what I had posted on your page..
    Be sure that I appreciated your poem. I only tried to give you some information about haiku (this kind of Japanese poetry has a lot of 'followers' also outside Japan, but many don't know it well, and misinterpretation are quite common) .
    You are very young.. But I'll tell you, it is really beautiful to know that at 12 you already love Poetry! !
    Keep on writing and posting!
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  • (1/23/2016 12:20:00 PM)

    For the confusion about my age, i am not 16! I hope that being 12 will not stop me from going on the website! i was forced to click 2000 as it was the youngest! i was born in 2003 September so I'm sorry again for the confusion I've caused (Report) Reply

  • (1/23/2016 12:13:00 PM)

    I have noticed the comments on my poem, and i wasn't aware that it would cause many problems! If this bothers you then i am sorry for the misunderstanding! I haven't heard of a Senryu form, so i didn't realise that it would cause confusion! SORRY! ! i feel as if i should have properly researched!
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  • Fabrizio Frosini (1/18/2016 11:44:00 AM)

    a nice write, Emily, this first poem of yours posted at P.H. - Yet, it is not a HAIKU, sorry.
    First, being it about dance, it is about 'human nature', not 'Nature' - from this point of view, it's more a SENRYU, not a haiku.
    But to call it a senryu, you have to modify the 3rd line, because senryu (like haiku) , have a 5-7-5 syllabic structure (in Japanese language, it's a bit more complicated, but in our languages we have a syllabic division) .
    Then, the title: haiku don't have title. Usually also senryu don't have title.
    A senryu doesn't need a 'kigo', so it's ok (but, saying the truth, also a tiny minority of japanese classical haiku don't express a kigo) .
    WELCOME AT POEM HUNTER, Emily and thanks for sharing! Keep on writing
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    (1/20/2016 2:03:00 PM)

    u right and i think people should learn what haiku is if they want to write haiku.so i find g.t.boston's comment absolutely out of place

  • (1/17/2016 10:16:00 AM)

    This was just a random poem i posted that can be related to dance, cheer, ballet or gymnastics. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, January 17, 2016

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