Real Shine Poem by Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal
Real Shine
For the first time I felt
About the real fragrance and smelt
The wind facilitated in my favor
It was heavenly sent and honor
To feel for someone is called love
From no where it emerges and makes us to believe
That there is someone you can bank upon
The charm in life is retained and not gone
I felt some ripples in heart
For the time being, I believed in some kind of art
It was just beginning or start
But I was in pure game and felt very much part
She was in neighborhood
Of course we all lived in brotherhood
But she pulled me like magnet
I too allowed my feelings to let
She may offer me rose flower
I shall respond as whistle blower
She may pick signals quickly
Come in window and exchange smilingly
Yes, the love mushroomed
The whole of garden blossomed
I became part of beautiful place
There was real shine on face
it's actually rly good 14 minutes ago by Calamitee ZzZzZz (Cuz They be sleeping on Me) to Real shine
Love Christine A3 minutes ago This poem was full of so much love!
Very good Anthony Davis2 minutes ago Now this one I like much better than arrogance spoils which more of an essay than a poem. Comment +1
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Too many cut pharses Kenneth White7 minutes ago I became part of beautiful place is just one example. Forcing meter by dicing up a line is an unpleasant sacrifice and halts the readers attention when they try to make sense of these Yoda sentences. Other than that this maintains beautiful imagery, I meerly suggest a rewrite, adjusting for whole statements
The essence is pure Tracy Bollinger2 minutes ago Caught the spontaneity of your feelings. Delicious joy. Your emotion explodes the language. You cross a lot of barriers.
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For the first time I felt About the real fragrance and smelt