Thursday, May 11, 2006
Red Face Comments
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Red bums
and sweet plums
Blue eye's
and long thighs
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David Darbyshire
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11 May 2006
David, I liked the way you composed this - giving no hint in the first two stanza's about the narrator's true feelings. Just wondered if the second to last line could be shortened slightly - 'I didn't want to be gay it is just the way I am' Only my humble opinion...! Kind regards, Justine
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12/19/2025 4:31:57 PM # 1.0.0
No clue at first then...... well there it is in black and white. Patricia