Small Cloister Poem by Liza Sud

Small Cloister

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In our small monastery,
which is called the department of Finance -
there is quietness, light and bliss.
Rosmarova is our abbess,

You should come in the morning, don't sleep.
and complete well the work of penance
And God will love you all for this,
to the measure of your Reverence.

And feel love to your own abbess,
like your mother she will love you.
and give preference to silence
not to loud voice: I argue.

As for men - what are they here for?
We will count all ourselves,
But since we have to say some word -
then let's say: we congratulate!

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В нашем маленьком монастыре
под названием Бухгалтерия, -
тишина, благодать и свет,
Розмарова в нем игуменией.

Приходи по утрам, не спи,
исполняй хорошо послушание,
И Господь вас будет любить
в вашей степени подражания.

Игуменью свою люби.
Она любит тебя, как мать.
и молчание предпочти
громогласному: возражать.

А мужчины - зачем здесь они?
мы и сами все посчитаем.
но раз что-то сказать должны,
мы вас все-таки - поздравляем!

Wednesday, January 11, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: love and life
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Unnikrishnan E S 12 January 2017

Hi Liz, A small cloister, from where you've banished all men.. Your way of likening the work place to a nunnery (because, all women) , gives one a wide smile. The subtle humour in the make-up of the poem gives it an enduring charm. As for men - what are they here for? We will count all ourselves, Nice..10++

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Daniel Brick 12 January 2017

You created an extended metaphor of the work place as a nunnery, that is, all women dedicated to a higher purpose. And you show the daily lives of its female membership supportive, honest, productive. I like the lightness of tone, it makes this ideal situation seem genuine. The last stanza has a cleverly phrased dismissal men from your all-female - it sounds like you DON'T need them and so brush them off. Of course, if I were there, I'd be brushed off too. But that's OK because you are sincerely trying to create the vision of a conflict-free sisterhood and that is a goal outsiders cannot belong to.

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