Wednesday, September 21, 2005

The Drowned City Comments

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She once bore fruit of exquisite taste
Lemons, apples and bananas
Were eaten by sailors who came by
Her fruits bore life
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Lee John Siebritz
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Herbert Nehrlich1 21 September 2005

First stanza I would change one 'bore'. Possibly into 'meant life'? Just a thought. A very nice poem. Thank you. H

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