The Gift Of Health - Sanjay Pasari Poem by Sanjay Pasari
The Gift Of Health - Sanjay Pasari
In a world full of hustle and bustle,
Where time slips away like a river's tussle,
It is easy to forget the gift we possess,
A treasure so precious, we often repress.
Our health, a prized jewel, shining bright,
Yet often neglected, out of sight,
But pause for a moment, take a breath,
Reflect on the miracle, life's bequest.
For in good health, we find our strength,
The power to conquer any length,
To climb mountains and conquer fears,
When we're healthy, the world appears.
Nourish your body, mind, and soul,
With love and care, make yourself whole,
Eat wholesome foods that give you life,
Exercise, move, and find joy in every stride.
Sleep deeply, for it renews and restores,
Unwind your mind, let go of life's chores,
Embrace laughter, for it heals the heart,
Surround yourself with positive art.
Choose wellness as a lifelong dance,
A commitment to give yourself a chance,
To live fully, in body and mind,
Embrace the gift, for health, you'll find.
Remember, dear friend, you hold the key,
To unlock the door to health's decree,
Let gratitude guide your every choice,
And in doing so, let your health rejoice.
So cherish this gift, embrace it tight,
For in good health, your world shines bright,
May you always find balance and grace,
In the ever-present embrace of health embrace.
(cont.) ... It IS a fine ryhme. On rare occasions I use a non-rhyming word where I can't think of a GOOD rhyming one. I read your bio. : )
st.8: I'd use 'tightly' and 'brightly', for more than one reason. AND I KNOW that some simple tweaking of the last line would get rid of the 1st (of 2!) 'embrace's & (in my opinion) leave a MUCH nicer last line. : ) bri 4 stars
stanza 7: As it generally is, your rhyming is fine. I DO question your thinking re your use of 'decree' and 'gratitude'. Whose decree? Gratitude to whom and/or for what?
'Embrace the gift, for health, you'll find.' I like how you worked to get line-ending rhyme by using commas and positioning two phrases differently than one might usually position them in prose or poetry.
st 4 'Unwind your mind, let go of life's chores, Embrace laughter, for it heals the heart, ' I like esp. 'unwind'/'mind' rhyme and 'heals the heart' alliteration. ;)
st.3 line 3: I would replace comma with a period. PERIOD! ! : ) st.4 line 4 I would tweak this line to end with a word rhyming with life; I KNOW one.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Delivering Poems Around The World
Poems are the property of their respective owners. All information has been reproduced here for educational and informational purposes to benefit site visitors, and is provided at no charge...
5/8/2024 6:42:52 PM # 1.0.0.1119
stanza 1: 'tussle'? : as a noun: '1: a physical contest or struggle: scuffle 2: an intense argument, controversy, or struggle tussle' Do you, poet, think 'tussle' 'fits' here? I don't. (cont.)