Lyndsay Ayliffe

The Moose - Poem by Lyndsay Ayliffe

I stand there quietly looking at the sky
People come here to let go
It’s so quiet that I could hear a fly
People come here to grow

I spot a moose standing in the middle of a field
The moose is quiet and beautiful
He realizes that he’s been revealed
He’s no longer invisible

He runs away into the open night
I take a deep breath in and sigh
Thinking about what I just saw, that incredible sight
I whisper to the moose, goodbye

Topic(s) of this poem: travel

Form: Rhyme Royal or Rime Royale

Comments about The Moose by Lyndsay Ayliffe

  • Daniel Brick (12/23/2015 7:13:00 AM)

    PEOPLE COME HERE TO LET GO/PEOPLE COME HERE TO GROW - I believe both things happen in this poem.
    There is a connection here: to grow you have to let go of things which might block growth. You let the reader find this truth for her/himself. You focus your words on the moose, and make its presence felt as a special mystery which doesn't need further words. It just is, and then it isn't. The fleeting quality of experience is affirmed. Catch it on the spur!
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  • Daniel Brick (11/24/2015 9:33:00 PM)

    I like your rhyming in this poem. The interlocking rhymes pull the poem together. I've never used rhyme; I'm scared of it
    because I think it will reduce the scope of my poem, but instead I find in your poem it seems to bring everything to a common center. I like the way you let this animal live his animal life in your poem. You don't treat him as a performer doing tricks for us humans. His life has integrity and fullness in your poem. When I reread your poem the fourth line really struck me. That's what your poem does: it makes us grow larger inside because we have made a silent contact with OTHERNESS - the sky, the moose, the day itself.
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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, November 4, 2015

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