danyelle tedrow

The Shell - Poem by danyelle tedrow

i have thise shell that whont go away its so pain full the memerois i have makes me so sad and you think its funny to see me in pain as icry you smile as i weep you you smile you made me do the un thinkable thing you made me die in side the cuts on my arm remind me to never trust agen my shell of pain and suffering

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  • (3/2/2010 2:58:00 PM)

    lol shelby pretty much sumed up my point xP
    10! ! !
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  • (1/27/2010 9:56:00 AM)

    i fucking love this poem. omfg

    wow great job
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  • John Knight (12/7/2009 5:12:00 PM)

    Hi Danyelle - I'm going to give you another revamp to release a lovely poem from your Prose - OK.

    I have this Shell that won't go away
    It's so painful - the memories I have
    Make me so sad and smile as I wwep.
    You smile you made me do the unspeakable thing
    You made me die inside - I am again
    In my Shell of pain and suffering.

    OK that looks real good (to me) so I am ready to comment.

    Line One / Two - We all have a shell of memories thaty come back and haunt us ans like a turtle's shell it restricts us. It makse us sad it makes us weep it makes us smile - what a mess! There are always people who force us into situations we dont want to e in and make us do things we dont want to do - while we cry - at the memory - they laugh. And the pain comes back again. You know Angel life is too short and too brief to keep fretting about the past - we need to forget the past (forgive if we have to) and grasp the future! I score you a TEN ecaus this poem has great content and angst and great potential. Love you in Poetry - JOHN X
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Poem Submitted: Monday, December 7, 2009

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