Naveed Akram

Gold Star - 23,966 Points (15 December 1973 / London, England)

Thoughts Beget - Poem by Naveed Akram

My red colour shakes in the begotten springs,
The blood streams ahead of reality today.
For the colour of fortune is the same as clay:
Sleep in innocence, so I admire though abstain.
The real avenues of thought beget other thinkers,
Their forceful pen is upon us all with glaring neon
Lights, fulfilling the autumns and springs.

My righteous thinkers sustain the only pen,
Then the loud estimates succeeded only once.
My righteous philosophers sustain and cherish
One after the other.

The modern world has been a fact of brilliance,
More periodic fighting begets music and pain,
Then the truce of truth is forgiven by foretellers
Like monks and priests of the noble character.

My blue colour is like the sky at day in fierce
Readiness, into the fighting jets above.
Neon lights glare and stand on the ledge,
Lulling the paint of an artist, the arts are more
Than me, the sciences relentlessly free
Certain individuals who concentrate.

Topic(s) of this poem: thoughts

Form: Free Verse

Comments about Thoughts Beget by Naveed Akram

  • (11/16/2015 3:33:00 AM)

    The language is poetic. I have to give you that, but I am not sure if I got the poem in its whole. There were parts in it that I failed to comprehend and failed to see what you were trying to say. Maybe this is with me more than it is with you, so I will not take much for it.

    I got the feeling that you were trying to say too much and as a result this poem seems to go at it from the point of several subjects to make a whole or complete meaning but this, in my humble opinion, is a failure here.

    Well, give this to you: you made me think with this try and for that I give you much thanks.

    The best to you!

    Luis A. Estable
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Poem Submitted: Monday, November 16, 2015

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