Tuesday, May 9, 2006

To Lose Your Sight Comments

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To lose your sight would truly be,
The most intense of tragedy.
Just think of all you would not see,
If you lost your sight like me.
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Alyssa George
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Goldy Locks 09 May 2006

hmm, good work. i would just say make the ending stronger- tie it up to the start & your opening theme. did you mean sight? as opposed to site. anyway this reminds me of a line from a song by Arcade Fire- 'i scratch your name across my eyelids- you pray for rain, i pray for blindness...' alright, keep it up! best care, sus.

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