Try Poem by Sara Shadows

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Rating: 3.5


neurotic i am
she said twice
and twitched

terrible twists in
my mind tie to
anxiety

trying trying trying she
said thrice to tame
the tense

take deep breathes
she told the girl
who operates her mind

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Robert Quilter 15 September 2008

I like this.The repetitions and the overall feel of edginess is well done in a few words and only four stanzas.And anyone who gets the word thrice into a poem is pretty ok with me. However i suspect her trying didnt have a happy outcome.

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