Jerrell Frazier

Rookie - 194 Points (7/20/1995 / alabama)

Water Comparison - Poem by Jerrell Frazier

Flowing cool delightful
Filled with energy and beautiful creatures
Bending sparkling filed with life
Water
Complex but yet so simple
Cast a stone and reveil its ripple
Water
A live and well
Just like us humans but we can't tell
From molecule to cell broking down to atoms
We can't tell that beauty and water is always around us

Topic(s) of this poem: life, reality, science


Comments about Water Comparison by Jerrell Frazier

  • Terry Craddock (12/9/2015 10:07:00 PM)


    'Flowing cool delightful
    Filled with energy and beautiful creatures
    Bending sparkling filed with life'

    this is good, filed should be filled, I do this sometimes, shows promise; talent, therefore I ask, is it what you wanted to say, or do you want to develop or change it a little, the differences are depths :)

    good luck and power to your pen
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    Jerrell Frazier (12/10/2015 7:32:00 PM)

    i chose filed to be different from filled because it shows that the water has all types if life in it that's why i used filed instead of filled so i wouldn't repeat myself and confuse others.

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  • Gajanan Mishra (12/9/2015 8:15:00 PM)


    beauty is always with us.. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, December 9, 2015



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