When It Comes To You Poem by Nosipho Africanqueen Mtabani

When It Comes To You

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When it comes to you, I'm lost without words.
You hold me captive in this exile territory,
You turn me on to the highest degree-
Heating me up to a point of explosion.

When it comes to you;
My energy ripples like a stone dropped into a pond.
Emotions gush like the furious Orange,
They gambol with the glamour you bring me
As you grow like a fungus in me.

My mind is bruised so sweet with the fantasies I have Of you with me,
My heart gallops like a horse in a race
To win, to grab your heart.
Man, what all this is I can't tell
All I know is that you are a parasite in my brain.

You strike me with mind-blowing sensations,
Sending out vibrations only you and I can relate to.
You formulate in me a sphere I never believed existed.
Baby boy, is this love?
You create a magical spell that goes beyond Witchcraft chemistry,
You seize in me what no man could,
And now I'm flabbergasted to a stage of insanity-
A point of infinity.

When it comes to you lover boy;
Your charm is simply beyond description.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Zakes Mo 29 June 2011

I believe in this Poem u where too forward, and u tried too hard for us to understand were you are coming from and going. i believe u underestimated ur audience. 'My heart gallops like a horse in a race' Lets take this phrase for example, The word GALLOPS gives u picture that something or someone is in a particular motion, then the IN A RACE restricted our imagination and shows too much emphasis. If you were to look at the entire Poem, it is overly explanatory. Firstly, the title says to me its a conversation between the two, no need to single out everytime the YOU and I till to the end. Further than that its ok.

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