Why Me? Poem by Krissy Alley

Why Me?



I liked you since we first met. You were with a girl that asked you out.
She hurt you and I was there to comfort you.
Didn't you realize I liked you more than a friend? You ignored my love.
Another girl holding you hand the next day. A girl that asked you out.
Again you're hurt.
I'm there to comfort you. Again you ignore my love.
Since you were too shy to ask anyone out, I got the courage to ask you out. You turned me down.
Another girl holding you hand that asked you out. She hurt you like all the other girls do. They use you,
but me, I'm there for you.
What's wrong with me?
Are you blind?
I went out to a party and you called my cell. You said you needed to talk. I figured it was another girl with you.
What did you just ask? You want to go out with me?
You never ask girls out? He says I'm different and I make him feel good about himself.2 years we date. six months later were married. Happy life. No grudges held. Just fighting like every other couple.
Still to this day I ask myself,
Why me?

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Sandra Dodd 09 February 2010

well it did not let me finish If your interested break it up to one thought per line get rid of the and but for of's mostly and send it to me in a message. There is a great poem here, but as is needs work. I always write on a word program use the thesauras heavily ie the word love can be amour, charity, adoration, friendship, tenderness, feeling, fondness, devotion, passion, ardor, amity (formal) or the verb love can be adore, worship, be in love with, be devoted to, care for, find irresistible, be fond of, hold dear, be keen on, fancy (UK, informal) VARIETY OF LANGUAGE KEEPS THE POEM FLOWING TO THE END AND THE READERS INTEREST! You have a cleaver them here, run with it.

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Sandra Dodd 09 February 2010

good thme but your organization is all over the place lets try something, now your going to hate me! n my suggewtins in ALL CAPS 1. usually no more than 7 words per line I liked you since we first met. You were THERE with a girl that asked you out. She hurt you(DONT NEED AND IN A POEM, IMPLIED) I was there to comfort you. Didn't you (MAKE IT) DID YOU NOT realize I liked you more than a friend? You ignored my love. Another girl holding you hand the next day. A girl that asked you out. Again you're hurt. I'm there to comfort you. Again you ignore my love. Since you were too shy to ask anyone out, I got the courage to ask you out. You turned me down. Another girl holding you hand that asked you out. She hurt you like all the other girls do. They use you, but me, I'm there for you. What's wrong with me? Are you blind? I went out to a party and you called my cell. You said you needed to talk. I figured it was another girl with you. What did you just ask? You want to go out with me? You never ask girls out? He says I'm different and I make him feel good about himself.2 years we date. six months later were married. Happy life. No grudges held. Just fighting like every other couple. Still to this day I ask myself, Why me?

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