There are beautiful angels in heaven made of golden light
That rarely let themselves be seen in our sight
But I know of wingless angels upon this earth
They bring a message of great mirth
And help those who are in need of it
They can even be in need of it
Because they are only humans trying for God to do the right things
These angels are imperfect and mess up in all kinds of things
But they try, even if they are wingless beings
note: It never actually says in the Bible Angels sing or have wings
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Things I like: Coherent message - This writer of this poem is expressing their belief that there are those on this planet that spread joy. They are, however, in need of fellow 'angels'; since they are only human. Good flow - The flow of this poem is great; especially the way the writer repeated the word 'need.' Things That Need Work: Flow of last few lines need work - 'Because they are only humans trying for God to do the right things' is a bit of a run-on and detracts from the flow of the next line. 'But at least they try, even if they are just wingless beings' - I think the flow of this line would be improved immensely if you removed the words: at, even, if, they, are and just; or perhaps cut down on most of them. Overall impression: Great piece that I enjoyed reading. It was strong with both emotion and direction. Great work and keep writing!