Tuesday, October 6, 2015

Within My Mind Comments

Rating: 4.0

Within my mind I create new worlds and places,
The characters change and have new faces.

But they always continue to remain the same,
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Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr 06 October 2015

Commendable Work, Jennie....Your choice in employing a Couplet stanzaei structure works quite well, here...Try to keep a smooth rhythm by counting syllables, and then reading your work out loud to make sure that each line flows /fluxes well with the next...Remember... you want your Audience to tead your work the way you'd recite it.Keep that pen pumping, young lady! ~FjR~

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