You Gasped Poem by M.J. Lemon

You Gasped

Rating: 5.0


Keep the chair, the pets,
the artwork, the antiques
and I'll even throw in the garden hose
Just as long as my fate, a rose

In your hands bleeds hope
and crouches underneath
the memories of togetherness
that dispel insecurities, prowess-

that make me infirm.
Sitting, back straight eyes closed
legs crossed hands clasped
you sang, a low voice. You gasped.

Monday, February 16, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: love
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Leeann Azzopardi 24 February 2020

this is ingenius on how people break up and with humour

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Mj Lemon 25 February 2020

There's humour at the time...but often not acknowledged. Thank you, LeeAnn.

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Me Poet Yeps Poet 28 August 2019

the success you have achieved is the fact ur answering readers each what a generosity MJL

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Mj Lemon 29 August 2019

Thank you, Poet. I am always grateful for a reader!

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Valsa George 06 January 2019

Even in despair, there is hope and this hope sustains life! I sense a kind of longing in your poem! Memories of togetherness arouse deep sense of nostalgia! Great write!

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Mj Lemon 06 January 2019

Valsa, so much appreciated. Thank you.

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Bri Edwards 11 December 2018

i now see you responded to one of my comments. i'm adding this to my/our January 2019 Showcase. Thanks. bri (

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Mj Lemon 12 December 2018

Thanks for the honour, Bri! Hope all is going well in beautiful NC...a land that must be inspirational to the poet.

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Bri Edwards 23 November 2018

(CONT.) C - And I think your pattern of capitalization is inconsistent with the rules of prose, AND with the ‘usual pattern’ in poetry. It is not the easiest ‘read’ for me, but I like it. To MyPoemList. Bri (:

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Mj Lemon 25 November 2018

Thank you so much, Bri. You are right on about prose. Not too sure about the poetry, though. There have been many innovations.

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