Brotherhood Don'T Come From Blood, But Love Poem by adheez van der beanthz

Brotherhood Don'T Come From Blood, But Love

Rating: 5.0


That's true..
we grew up together
one father, also one mother
even one blood tree
at least in pedigree

I will not to deny it
not even the slightest

but..
is that strong enough?
enough to overcome differences that hamper?
such a grandeur?
or will it end like peanut shells, sir?

I don't want to know the answer
never..! ! !

because indeed..
we can't work together
never relent each other
also defend like brother

then..
with what we will survive?
with message and advice?
oh come on..! ! !
it's just a hoax

to be honest..
thin threads as red as blood
how long you can survive
without love and trust
in a fragile life
that's full of lies?

herocity,240512

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kelvin Owusu 16 June 2013

the last stanza says it all in my opinion an excellent piece

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David Wood 18 June 2013

The last stanza is the clincher. A good write.

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fine poem...10 love rules with bond tools that is reality a fine quality

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Jesus Diaz Llorico 21 June 2013

a lovely write, penned so beautifully..love, respect and trust that is what we need to have.

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Pranab K Chakraborty 28 June 2013

The problem illustrated nicely. But some problems go with us even to the graveyard, yet life flows with a discontinue wave and it is the law of life. Man creates or imposes love even to the stones for necessary. So if anyone suffer, have to dig somewhere else.

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Bri Edwards 27 March 2014

I will not to deny it ............ i applaud you for translating your poem. drop the to from this line. :) - - - - - - - - - - - enough to hold the difference that hamper? such a grandeur? or will end like peanut shells, sir? ........i will give my OPINION on these lines as well, especially since, in your bio, you welcome suggestions. MY SUGGESTIONS: enough to OVERCOME the differenceS that hamper? such a grandeur? or will IT end like peanut shells, sir? .......i like the use of peanut shells. very nice. - - - - - - - from online: re·lent ri'lent/ verb verb: relent; 3rd person present: relents; past tense: relented; past participle: relented; gerund or present participle: relenting 1. abandon or mitigate a harsh intention or cruel treatment. she was going to refuse his request, but relented synonyms: change one's mind, backpedal, do a U-turn, back down, give way/in, capitulate; More become merciful, become lenient, agree to something, allow something, concede something; formal accede the government finally relented (esp. of bad weather) become less severe or intense. by evening the rain relented synonyms: ease off/up, slacken, let up, abate, drop, die down, lessen, decrease, subside, weaken More the rain has relented Origin late Middle English (in the sense ‘dissolve, melt’) : based on Latin re- ‘back’ + lentare ‘to bend’ (from lentus ‘flexible’) . ADHEEZ, in the following lines, i don't like the use of relent. do you mean you brothers can't stop annoying one another? ? and in the third line, do you mean you don't, won't, and/or can't defend each other (emotionally?) ? because indeed.. we can't work together never relent each other also defend like brother - - - - - - - - - HERE i'll put my suggestions in brackets []. then..with what [WILL] we survive? with message and advice? oh come on..! ! ! [i like this! ] it [IT'S] just a hoax - - - - - - - - - i agree that the last stanza is VERY NICE in its expression of the whole poem in just a few lines, as readers David and Kelvin imply in their comments. to be honest.. thinner [ THIN? ] threads as red as blood how long you can survive? [maybe move the question mark to the end of the stanza? ] without love and trust in a fragile life that [THAT'S or THAT IS] full of lies .........well, hopefully your life is not FULL of lies! ! ! thanks for sharing. bri :) YOU ARE the poet. i just offer suggestions. i think i shall send this to MyPoemList.

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Queeny Gona 20 August 2013

You may read one of my poems titled Brotherhood that falls on the similar lines. You may add your valuable comments, suggestions.

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Queeny Gona 20 August 2013

No relation can sustain without trust and love, be it be a blood relation or friendship! The concept of joint family lost its prominence due to lack of love and trust among the family members. Great in thought and write.

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Valsa George 07 August 2013

Though often blood is thicker than water, unless built on the strong foundations of trust and love, no relationship will stay and thrive! A very powerful write! !

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Jemima Rivas 05 August 2013

So true, how long you can survive without love and trust... i especially like the last part although i have never felt that way you actually bring the feeling.... marvelously put down!

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