That's true..
we grew up together
one father, also one mother
even one blood tree
at least in pedigree
I will not to deny it
not even the slightest
but..
is that strong enough?
enough to overcome differences that hamper?
such a grandeur?
or will it end like peanut shells, sir?
I don't want to know the answer
never..! ! !
because indeed..
we can't work together
never relent each other
also defend like brother
then..
with what we will survive?
with message and advice?
oh come on..! ! !
it's just a hoax
to be honest..
thin threads as red as blood
how long you can survive
without love and trust
in a fragile life
that's full of lies?
herocity,240512
fine poem...10 love rules with bond tools that is reality a fine quality
a lovely write, penned so beautifully..love, respect and trust that is what we need to have.
The problem illustrated nicely. But some problems go with us even to the graveyard, yet life flows with a discontinue wave and it is the law of life. Man creates or imposes love even to the stones for necessary. So if anyone suffer, have to dig somewhere else.
I will not to deny it ............ i applaud you for translating your poem. drop the to from this line. :) - - - - - - - - - - - enough to hold the difference that hamper? such a grandeur? or will end like peanut shells, sir? ........i will give my OPINION on these lines as well, especially since, in your bio, you welcome suggestions. MY SUGGESTIONS: enough to OVERCOME the differenceS that hamper? such a grandeur? or will IT end like peanut shells, sir? .......i like the use of peanut shells. very nice. - - - - - - - from online: re·lent ri'lent/ verb verb: relent; 3rd person present: relents; past tense: relented; past participle: relented; gerund or present participle: relenting 1. abandon or mitigate a harsh intention or cruel treatment. she was going to refuse his request, but relented synonyms: change one's mind, backpedal, do a U-turn, back down, give way/in, capitulate; More become merciful, become lenient, agree to something, allow something, concede something; formal accede the government finally relented (esp. of bad weather) become less severe or intense. by evening the rain relented synonyms: ease off/up, slacken, let up, abate, drop, die down, lessen, decrease, subside, weaken More the rain has relented Origin late Middle English (in the sense ‘dissolve, melt’) : based on Latin re- ‘back’ + lentare ‘to bend’ (from lentus ‘flexible’) . ADHEEZ, in the following lines, i don't like the use of relent. do you mean you brothers can't stop annoying one another? ? and in the third line, do you mean you don't, won't, and/or can't defend each other (emotionally?) ? because indeed.. we can't work together never relent each other also defend like brother - - - - - - - - - HERE i'll put my suggestions in brackets []. then..with what [WILL] we survive? with message and advice? oh come on..! ! ! [i like this! ] it [IT'S] just a hoax - - - - - - - - - i agree that the last stanza is VERY NICE in its expression of the whole poem in just a few lines, as readers David and Kelvin imply in their comments. to be honest.. thinner [ THIN? ] threads as red as blood how long you can survive? [maybe move the question mark to the end of the stanza? ] without love and trust in a fragile life that [THAT'S or THAT IS] full of lies .........well, hopefully your life is not FULL of lies! ! ! thanks for sharing. bri :) YOU ARE the poet. i just offer suggestions. i think i shall send this to MyPoemList.
You may read one of my poems titled Brotherhood that falls on the similar lines. You may add your valuable comments, suggestions.
No relation can sustain without trust and love, be it be a blood relation or friendship! The concept of joint family lost its prominence due to lack of love and trust among the family members. Great in thought and write.
Though often blood is thicker than water, unless built on the strong foundations of trust and love, no relationship will stay and thrive! A very powerful write! !
So true, how long you can survive without love and trust... i especially like the last part although i have never felt that way you actually bring the feeling.... marvelously put down!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
the last stanza says it all in my opinion an excellent piece