heart cried very softly
for the hopes that belied
but soul never want to stop
even if just once to pull over
I'm tired..
even too weak
wander without aim
who knows, till when can be change
if this feeling is fantasy
allow me to say sorry
no matter if only glimmer
with you, I can be brighter
If this feeling is sin
let the Hell wins
so you can understand
without you, heaven lost its brand
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Adheez, you have asked me to do something with the title. I think the content is really fine. But if I were to give the title, I would call it- The Humming Hope in Time. Thanks for sharing and asking for response. Take care and keep on posting.
The poem delivered from your heart, we felt it that way, now i am sorry for being late, this already have a new title and it is great one..but i hope you try to make brighter poem that tell what your courage in you..let it be out and you will find it will be a stronger side of you...and i would call it as The return of my reflection...well if you ever write it that will be the name hahahahaha.._SOul
I think we have a misunderstanding here, especially for elizabeth and soul in this poem, I did not ask for the title but of course I appreciate the feedback that has been given and I liked the title proposed by elizabeth As for the title of the poem to demand that I send it to a poem which is now titled just an ordinary bridge for extraordinary dreams once again I thank you for your input
Beautifully expressed of such strong emotions that without your lover heaven has even lost its brand!
Even just a glimmer of hope can really turn things around especially When it comes to love and passion. Love can be so deep sometimes it causes us to lose all sense of levity. Then we begin to ask the question how can something that feels so good cause so many problems? A nice write, keep on penning.
A very good poem, If this feeling is sin let the Hell wins These are great lines indeed, a passionate theme and a smooth rhythm, welldone,
Feelings and thoughts simply stated always has the desired effect, nicely written.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Plea for love is indeed no crime in life! Heaven on Earth lies in love only! Nice poem, my friend!