0431 You Couldn'T Make It Up... I Hope... Poem by Michael Shepherd

0431 You Couldn'T Make It Up... I Hope...

Rating: 2.4


Off the coast of California
where else
hornyhead turbot
and there's a name for a start
were found to be bisexual with
ovary tissues in their testes

the males were found congregated
around a sewage outlet

before graffiti writers
and fundamentalist preachers
develop the implications of
this newsflash
I think I'll stop
right there

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ben Cassel 26 November 2005

The end is perfect and perfectly timed. Every aspect of the poem adds to its humor: the name of the confused little fish; the image of them congregating around the sewage outlet (no doubt smoking anchovies and propositioning passing schools of fish (male, female, etc.): and the invitation to the reader to speculate at his/her/its peril all combine to make this a delight.

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Michael Shepherd 16 November 2005

... the comma's out... with thanks for reading it so carefully...

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John Kay 15 November 2005

Michael...this is close to perfect. Does it need the comma.

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Mahnaz Zardoust-Ahari 15 November 2005

I don't know if it is better to say they made it up or if they are actually telling the truth....nicely done.

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Ahh...so, you've visited my fair state.... nice poetic journalism. IAMB impressed!

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Michael Shepherd

Michael Shepherd

Marton, Lancashire
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