Lawrence S. Pertillar

Gold Star - 48,706 Points (February/'47 / Connecticut, USA)

A Fighting Against Gale Enforced Winds - Poem by Lawrence S. Pertillar

Oh no!
There has been an oversight.
A little loophole.

When applying the bricks,
To fortify contents inside the compound...
The blueprint we have 'just' been presented,
There was no cement mentioned,
To hold the bricks together.

In fact,
None had been used.
It's here in print.
How can the makers of the compound,
Skip over that?

How those bricks held together,
Is a mystery.

Those reported comments earlier stated,
About a fighting against gale enforced winds.
And people risking their lives,
To sandbag walls to prevent them from caving in...
Has to be re-written.
Or at least,

This is an opportunity to enhance the struggle,
Against the opposition.
And a prior status given...
To the ones declared as putting their lives on the line.
This time around,
We will announce they've been true heroes!

'How about...
A slinging of mud thrown viciously,
That disrupted into a fierce and brave retaliation? '

I love it.
Sounds good to me.
Release 'that' immediately.
And add something about a dog.
Appearing from nowhere...
Wearing infrared goggles.
And somehow...
Managed to drag survivors to safety!
That should take the focus off of the cementless bricks.

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Poem Submitted: Friday, May 6, 2011

Poem Edited: Saturday, May 7, 2011

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