A Night, By Your Side Poem by Putholi Arumugham
A Night, By Your Side
Waves, the words of these untiring seas
Writing an endless poetry in your beauty’s praise.
Stars, the night earth’s replacement for birds
In your blanket to match hues in your soporific eyes
Breeze, the partner for the moon light at this hour
at ball dance which music conducts in your honor.
Lark and nightingales, the singers of lullabies for world
by your side to take notes of your sleepy blabberings.
Dews, perspiration of green grasses turning blue
due to shameful loss in matching your skins softness
Bringing all these into life
and reflecting them in the tiny dropp of tears
of joy at the corner of my eye
Your careless whispers in my ears.
I think this is very well writen and i like it as far as poems go. Work on the flow for this one though. Have fun writing: 3
'by your side to take notes of your unconscious moans' I like this line, lost in pleasure, without inhibitions, with someone completely attentive. I would be impressed to see you take this line and paint the senses surrounding it with words.
This is a very wonderful poem. I rated it a 9 for you. there was one thing i found wrong with this poem, but it is still very elegant and as you said to mine, moving. the problem i found was, the part where you talked about the unconsious moans, it seemed like you wanted your poem to be of love and joy, but that part made it sound like the person was depressed. Other than that the poem was of beauty.
i ke this poem..very deep....plz comment some of my poems..thnx.
'Waves, the words of these untiring seas Writing an endless poetry in your beauty’s praise' these first two lines give a robust kicking start for this beautiful romantic poem...the style more or less mine! very much enjoyed... congrats, arumugham! ten for you
Wow. I love this poem, your an amazing writer. Simply beautiful. It gives of a wonderful image to me. Great everything =] 'Stars, the earth’s replacement for birds' amazing line by the way. =].
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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Paints a beautiful picture