A Serious Poem Poem by Florence P. Wordsmith

A Serious Poem

Rating: 4.0


the trembling of my hand
fate's string dangles
twisting my vision to one
that cannot be
the dust settles callously
over the meandering stream of thought
throughout the forest of my pain
I cannot guess the times
that fortune has passed me by
in favor of the senseless drudging
of the moon's cool heat
upon a summer's first snowfall

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Dmitri Romanovski 28 January 2009

Your skill in maneuvering the labyrinth of the English language really is quite skillful. Well done, oh traveled one.

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Vidyadhar Durgekar 10 February 2009

Interesting and intriguing and well written

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Malcolm Bacchus 03 February 2009

I feel like the imagery here is jumping out and grabbing me by the tips of my hair and yanking me into your poem.

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Greenwolfe 1962 02 February 2009

There is such a mixture of images here that no clear picture emerges from the myriad of word usages. The reader is left in the dark. GW62

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Catrina Heart 02 February 2009

made my mind creeping for awhile...nice imagery...10/10

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Arthur Q. Kromwelle 29 January 2009

Very eloquent manipulation of poetic prose and verse.

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