Thursday, July 20, 2006

Another Paige In The Book Comments

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She says im different from any guy
How can she be so positive
Im the stalker being stalked nearby
We are good at taking but have yet to give
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King Midas 24 August 2006

This poem has excellent imagery, but it could be tightened up in some parts. Not bad, but you're capable of much more. Push the boundaries, call her a dumbB: D

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Kee Thampi 21 July 2006

She gives up everything such a risk taker Shes a wingless angel a forsaker Im her mirror man a guiltful heartbreaker When she shatters ill be Achilles her puzzle boy Ill nice simple poem and good images of story

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