Baby I Love You On And On Poem by Asif Andalib

Asif Andalib

Asif Andalib

Moez Monzil, Komlapur, Faridpur, Bangladesh

Baby I Love You On And On



Baby I love you on and on
You are like a fantastic morn
We'll ride on our dream's unicorn
And go as far as horizon
For me O baby you were born
Kiss me like sexy girls of porn
And squeeze me like a pet python
Give me pleasure more than a ton

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
John Raubenheimer 25 November 2012

Hi Asif, your poem has a freewheeling style and a spontaneity I enjoy. A the here and there would improve its flow and in my view morning rather than the archaic morn would be better (even though it's less of a rhyme) ? Good writing, I would sum up...

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Asif Andalib

Asif Andalib

Moez Monzil, Komlapur, Faridpur, Bangladesh
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