The black freezes solid
hard as ice
Time stops
Motionless I stand
Enveloped by the crystalic rain
Forced to face the RIOT
I myself have become
things my mind never imagined
have become all too Real
My skin, , tainted with past memories
and of what is yet to come, ,
tingles and forever more longs for your presence
never will i or want to break this addiction
your burning venom pierces my flesh
, , fills my veins, ,
in the mirror i reflect an image
i dont recognize myself
you have overcome me
a slave i have become
no longer does pure breath pass through my lungs
, , corrupted, ,
i am
and i find you
forever lingering
beneath the surface
changing me, morphing me
with your...
Black Actions
wow that was amazing it seemed almost perfect good job!
10/10, it's really dark, and yet it shows it's not all you that's dark, the is perfectly written in ways of 'Goth' poetry, and a good poem in any other poetry genre
Black actions...deceitful manifestations from the heart. So well penned, captivating read! ; D
now THIS is something that people would add to there favorites! ! well done! !
I really enjoyed this one. Seems like you put a lot into it.10/10
A very impressive poem written with almost life like action, you drew me into the poem as a good poet will do. You did an outstanding job on structure and flow. I give you a 10. Verrrrrry Goooood. Your friend Lynn
you got such good comments on this..what else can i say.. but as you asked for it i can only say that..keep writing..'coz i know that the best is yet to come and for me it's too close but not that..
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
oh my! WHY U DIDNT KEEP ON WRITING....it was such a good flo with perfect words..... pls....try to write more here, , , , it's such a good piece...