Tuesday, April 3, 2012

Clovers Comments

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In a field of clovers
He traced her mouth with his
Always thirsting for more
Please oh god
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Guy Wild
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Scotty Dogg 16 April 2012

Really good! Fix next to last line (then) I like it. I like the Water poem better, it's more visual. Give me something to SEE. What's her lips look like? S.

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Linda Maree 03 April 2012

those three words can change our whole outlook

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