Sunday, February 10, 2008

Coffee Shop Comments

Rating: 5.0

The temperature peaks and valleys
Changing with the bodies in the room.
Aroma like syrup. Sweet. Sticky.
Lingering in your senses long after.
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Frederick Francis
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Mary Gordley 11 February 2008

Frederick, I like this one a lot, it is a real 'slice of life'. Forgive the pun, but considering the theme I couldn't resist. There is a nice flow to the piece and I love this part: 'Opinions litter the floor like Empty peanut shells in a dingy bar They easily collapse under foot If I so choose to tread on them.'

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