Confesions And Faith Poem by racheal wiese

Confesions And Faith



it started a long time ago, before i ever knew your name.
now that i have done it i will never be the same.

whilst i sit here in this park, surrounded by darkend shadows,
my heart cries out to you to take all of my sorrows.

I'm not sure why i did it, i have no one else to blame,
i started living life like it was just a game,

Take my life in your hands, reshape and mold me i know you can,
you cant make me pure like the finest of gold
but in your hands my life you hold.

I let myself slip and he got a toe hold,
he turned wat was new back into old.

I want to be clean, renewed and restored,
I know you can do this if i ask you lord.

help me to be open to what my friends have to say,
help me deal with my problems and not run away.

No matter where you find me, no matter how far from you i am,
help me turn back to you no matter how far i have ran

I know i've made some pretty bad decisions,
been hiding from my fears, all the while knowing u could see and wipe away my tears,

forgive me for turning and running away from your light,
comfort and guide me through the tough days and nights.
forgive me and love me all the days of my life,
help and guide me when i'm in strife,
help me to be faithful and forgive me my sins,

jesus your my redeemer, your where my life begins

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Paul Buttigieg 12 April 2008

The message is there but the structure is harsh. Try breaking it up into little stories remember you are writing poetry not an esay. You are a very good writer you only need to develop your stucture. I really liked it Thanks

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