Hands drip, cold,
fevered claws cling
to neverending visages
of tormented rest.
Rain pounds drumbeats, joyous,
like punks sneering hearts
too alive to care
for simple slumber.
Tears of misread regret,
long since dried,
now vanish, vanquished
to forgotten fears.
I smile,
I'm alive.
In the night I hear
chances for redemption,
to sleep beyond forever.
The rush of love's nightmares
gently awakening tomorrow
written in your eyes.
Lillies within
my hearts dark garden
softly raise their faces
towards an amber moon.
I'm walking these hills
alive inside the night,
alone - not lonely
ready - not waiting.
Towards your path I'm drawn
step by stride,
my pace my own,
my heart in time with yours.
Sunlight - my tormentor-
breaks dreams hearts,
nothing lasts forever,
but soon - night will return.
25/5/08
Step by step you take us walking with you and your feelings...nicely done...Coach
Nicely done Viola my friend, you have written with such emotion in this fine piece and taken us on a journey of self discovery...beautiful in imagery and textures you could almost touch....'10' Best wishes Jon
i've never read a poem like this. its an entire novel basically. truly amazing. most certainly a 10! !
I have been doing a bit of 'trawling around' the website lately and I still haven't found anyone who writes with quite the same flow as you do. Sometimes your work seems seamless and effortless - and that's a gift. The smoothness of imagery in these words actually made me take a gulp of air! Yeah...I know it sounds stupid but this poem actually took my breath away for a micro-second and I have never experienced that before. A big big 10 for the number 1!
this is a really cool poem. I liked it a lot. Lillies within my hearts dark garden those lines along with many others are so Intriguing and makes your reader stop for a sec. to let the image flow completely through their mind. great job. Becca
Dreams; our subconciousness touching the reality of what we hope for... tomorrow. Beautiful as always, imagery and pictures abound with each sentence, flowing freely thorughout your 'Night' Noting less than ten dear lady.
i rate it a 10 million you have real talent keep it up i want more with this intensity
i really enjoyed reading this poem. i give it a 10! check out some of my stuff.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Viola - this is a marvelous poem, wrought with deep emotion, imagery and a yearning that is palatable. The poem is so rich in texture, I absolutely love it. Lillies within my hearts dark garden softly raise their faces towards an amber moon. Simply wonderful. Stone