Diane Hine

Silver Star - 4,143 Points (25 July 1956)

Edelweiss Finds L. In The Amazon* - Poem by Diane Hine

HE SAYS:
I'll show you the earthworks; canals, roads, mounds.
A decomposed city; no gold paradise,
yet nature can't rub it's imprints from the ground.
Welcome to my El Dorado Edelweiss.
Look how this ditch curves - I traced it a mile.
A moat maybe? - site of a stockade wall?
I admit I lured you here with barefaced guile
but can you see why this place holds me in thrall?
So, was it the appeal for help which drew you
or a bad poem with obvious flaws?
No matter, because what else can we conclude
but that love sent the bottle to your shore?
We walk side by side and your hand warmly ties
with mine, so why do you still avoid my eyes?

SHE SAYS:
Taking into account ocean currents
and 1900 global population,
the chance of mine and the bottle's convergence
were maybe better than one in a billion.
Tall odds granted, but not beyond reason
and you Lucretius, know I know you know that.
I was drawn by neither appeal nor poem.
You wrote on a whim and I came for a chat.
But your eyes can find a city consumed
by forest and they find too much in me.
I thought maybe with age I'd become immune....
Talk to me about archaeology.
They're like fish hooks, your eyes. They can't be prised
without pain. That's why I avoid your eyes.

Topic(s) of this poem: friendship


Poet's Notes about The Poem

Poems in this series are marked with an *
Edelweiss Petty and Hope make a Seaside Discovery
Captain Bryce in Tasmania
A Letter to England
Edelweiss finds L. In the Amazon
Hope (a rondeau)
Sestina: Captain Bryce in the Amazon
Lucretius and the Anteater
Hope and Edelweiss

Comments about Edelweiss Finds L. In The Amazon* by Diane Hine

  • (1/24/2013 1:04:00 AM)


    Lucretius seems to have turned out to be a lying bounder. Must be an English gentleman. And poor Edelweiss, hooked on his eyes. (Report) Reply

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  • Valerie Dohren (1/17/2013 5:02:00 AM)


    Poor Lucretius, eyes like fish hooks. No love story here then. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, January 16, 2013

Poem Edited: Saturday, March 8, 2014


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