Strings and brass
Depression glass
reflections of an era
black and white
in every sense–
flying feet
contradicting the stillness
of the foodlines.
A nation's hopes
in swirling satin
settling softly on his knee
as the music died.
Thank you for the imagery and contrast of elegance/movement against depression/stillness. You might stick to pure image and try a last line like, 'A nation's hopes in satin swirling softly against his knees.' The music died idea seems a bit played out.
Sigh. Those two on screen were beauty personified, as this gem of a poem captures perfectly. There's never been anything like it since, which is why that last line packs such a punch. I've always loved Ginger's quote 'I did everything Fred did - only I did it backwards and in heeels'. Hugs Anna xxx
I always say I would've loved to have been born back then..........life just seems to have been so much more romantic! Great poem Lori. Sincerely, Mary
Nice work. An unexpectedly serious ending makes the reader stop and think seriously about the contrast you present here. It was a pleasure to read.
Lori...well done. I like the precise images, almost like a Japanese painting.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I like this poem a lot, Lori. my mother used to watch those old Hollywood classics all the time, and I've seen quite a few as well. very good.10