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Grubs And Disire - Poem by DAVID GERARDINO

LIGHTING struck the
ground you walk on,
LIKE a spear, it hits
a vein.IT bleeds, and
break the mussle of
love, from the inside,
only the inside.
THE out side is painted
up like a whore, working
the night, still there
is hope, so much hope,
when you take off your
clouths, and wash away
this sin....AMEN

Comments about Grubs And Disire by DAVID GERARDINO

  • (1/20/2006 4:04:00 PM)

    when i read this poem it made me think about what a woman with a
    loose morality said to me way back in my past she said a quick wash will wipe away my guilt and i thought to myself will she wash her soul as well
    good write david

    regards AJS

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  • (1/20/2006 2:09:00 PM)

    I like the poem, but it just seems like you capitalize the wrong words. Its completely up to you how you write your poetry, but when you capitalize a whole word, you are usually trying to put emphasis on it.The words 'like' or 'the' really dont need emphasis in my opinion. Nice poem anyway, Michael (Report)Reply

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  • (1/20/2006 2:06:00 PM)

    'Painted up like a whore': this gave me something of a jerk. After having my spirits pulled down into a deep sense of corruption, damage, and repulsion, I'm glad to have been lifted back up again at the end with the surprise message of hope and possible purity. No idea what you're actually on about, though, but so what? Your poem has played to me! (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, January 20, 2006

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