I was lying under the heap of bricks
One two, ten, fifty, hundred, thousands...
I could not cry any more
They all fell upon me one by one
all at a time, I dont know how they exactly fell upon me
I saw the whole building becoming bricks
The debris rushed upon me
To bury me alive
I was dead, I was sure I was dead.
I never died earlier, so I did not know if I was dead.
Bricks fell on me one after one, all at a time
I bled profusely, my senses got benumbed
One of my eyes got blind
One of my arms bruised awfully,
I heard no human sound
But I longed to hear such a sound
Human voice could be so sweet to hear
I heard a man calling a man
'O, come here, a man is still breathing'
I lost my sense and heard no more.
a touching and soul-stirring write! ....buried alive under the bricks...loss of vision, loss of movement....a far fetched human voice and then complete blackout..at times even humaity cannot save lives...life must succumb to the pangs of fate.
Nice account of natural calamity reminds me of 2002 Gujarat earthquake that did such things and more! It is beyond our control telling that however powerful man is he cannot escape from Nature's wrath at times reminding him that we are all still under the control of Nature however civilsed or technologically modern!
It's not easy to feel someone else's feelings! And when it is a situation like this... Very well brought out.. :)
A poignant and empathetic composition! Buried under those words lies a sensitive heart! Best wishes. I am a newcomer to this site. I would like you to know that a selection of my poems too has been posted on this site. I would like you to know that I have pasted here a collection of my poems on the well known social worker late Baba Amte. I think you would be interested in reading more about him. I would like you to kindly go through some of them at your convenience, give your valuable comments and help me spread his universal message of harmony between man and man and between man and nature.
i understand each word that desribed the emotion for i too posted one 'life-force' i wrote on earthquake in iran...try reading it, if your time permits.
I read your poems and I love this best as it shows how true one can be feeling even though we do not involved in such situation. Every line could make us feel what the people feel specially those who have been saved in the rubble for days!
i enjoyed reading this poem...you are very creative and the words you choice i like that also.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
NICE PEACE I liked most these lines To bury me alive I was dead, I was sure I was dead. I never died earlier, so I did not know if I was dead.