Voices and noises
Of demons screaming
Howls and growls
Doesn’t feel like I’m dreaming
I look in the mirror
A disturbed image I see
I step back in shock
An alien thought: Just let it be
Give in, Give in
Those voices command
Don’t, my conscience says
But it really is out of hand
Persons inside a person
That’s what I’ve become
A life built on a lie
But my salvation is yet to come
I look around and see
A version of the world in black
But no, I will fight
I’m slowly getting back on track
Push, push
They’re not so strong
I will be victorious
I will win before long
Now I stand tall
Now my demons are dismissed
And from now on
I am my own exorcist
it rhymes thats for sure. Im glad you asked me to enjoy this nice poem. Nice as in experamental: D write more my friend
To be honest with you: It rhymes very good, but there is something missing in your poems, it is not finished, it's like You want to tell something after this poem, but I don't see it perfectly. Based on the poem: I think that there is God and there is devil, and that yet we choose who we allow to come into our live, and we need to make sure that God takes over everyday of our lifes.. God bless you. Hope to see more poems of yours. I invite you to checut my poems and rate them. Tell me what you think about them..
Ahmad, you poem is quite lyrical, so you get a perfect 10 in the structural part. The content is also good. You get a 8. Overall 9. You deserve to write better poetry. This is a great start.
cool poem. nice rhyming scheme. will u look at mine and maybe rate som plz.
I love the way you formulate your lines. THe message you share in this poem is a universal truth. We are the only to be our own exorcist to free ourselves from that which binds us to darkness. The struggle involves determination and courage, these two things that your poem has well demonstrated. The last verse affirms the joyful victory of freedom! Keep on writing. I do appreciate your poems.
amazing write Push, push They’re not so strong I will be victorious I will win before long Now I stand tall Now my demons are dismissed And from now on I am my own exorcist u have a gem.... u can be proud of it cheers
Perfectly written! ! :) loved it expecting more of you mr.abdulla! ! great keep up
Wow. Thats amazing. Keep writing. I would enjoy reading more of your poetry.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
couldn't agree more. love the rhythm and rhyme. the tone is really engaging and flow puts everything together. the idea is expressed really well.