I Pray Poem by Aden Orie

I Pray

Rating: 4.6


A fearful fight
within my head
i pray to your name
such ashame
a life that needs to change
so many things
i could re-arange
burning me down
i hold my flare
i wish i could fall into a comfy sleep
and always stay there
finally rest
and not a care
sinless
cumfy
forever in my sleep
lying there
my thuaghts arest
this head is tired
from this wicked fight
god i need you
to shine the light
and grab my hand
pull me away
we could finally talk
i whouldent have to pray
i could just say
hey
but right now
well my thuaghts are un asured
gods there
my voice can be heard

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Fay Slimm 10 December 2008

With a little editing this will be another winner Aden - - please proof-read your work though because this is so important.... people really do notice typos...... I think this deserves top marks however for it's content..... from Fay.

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Sarah Sisson 10 December 2008

I love this! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

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Sarwar Chowdhury 10 December 2008

Flow and thoughts praisworthy! fine! .......10+

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Raj Nandy 17 December 2008

Dear Aden, I start my day with prayers; prayer is something we should never forget! I loved your poem.10! -Raj Nandy

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Amber Lyn Charneski 16 December 2008

i like the emotion this is great

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Mohammed Albalushi 14 December 2008

' god i need you to shine the light and grab my hand pull me away' i pray 2, lovely poem in all meanings

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Izik Alcox 10 December 2008

You seem to be a very honest writer that speaks from his soul, good write

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Sid John Gardner. 10 December 2008

He's always here loking over us Aden.No matter how hard it gets, take time out.Concentrate on the beauty of creation, Forests, Trees, Beautiful sunsets.Sitting down to conversation with a friend over a beer. Best wishes Aden.Good write.A 10 from me.

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