Im Like Posion Comments

fighting for freedom whos freedom? their fighting themselves like me that is a hard pill for me to swallow... um.. I like the thought of those lines I think that is fare to say... but freedom is real... I live it day by day. (thank you men and women) oh and everyone leaves... my big brother left 3 years ago and my dad died my mom left... so I sorta know how you feel. you will one day leave. good job. ~MC~

nice. i think you should elaborate more. but good job has great potential of being an awesome poem needs some work tho but good start