Friday, January 9, 2015

It Fell Out Of My Hand Comments

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I held an ice-cream cone,
Which fell out of my hand.
I tried to pick it up,
But the melted ice-cream did land,
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Vera Sidhwa
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Khairul Ahsan 27 April 2015

I liked the last stanza of your poem. The preceding stanzas being a kind of fun, the last one ends in a sad note. That makes it a good poem- the contrast. I wonder if the words 'Felt Out' in the title should be 'Fell Out', as the text of the poem suggests.

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