It Started With A Kiss Poem by sweet girl

It Started With A Kiss

Rating: 5.0


The memory replays in my head,
I felt your lips touch mine.
It was great, but secretive,
I guess thats what made it so devine.

As I sit upon my windowsill thinking of you,
The cool breeze reminds me of your hugs.
Your breath just tickles my neck,
And your arms, just one of my drugs.

But nothing is like what I felt before,
The tingling sensation was nothing but true.
The warmth of each other's hearts,
When there was nothing I could do.
And the realization of our love.
The love of me and you.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Adeline Foster 22 October 2008

This is a good poem, but let’s give it the dignity that it deserves. Not that it does not have dignity in itself. You gave it that when you used the word “upon”. You have captured the sensations of the moment. Sensations that every young girl feels at that first kiss. For that reason this poem should go down in history as one of the best. So, let’s correct the grammatical notations. The word ‘that’s’ is a contraction of ‘that is’ so, notice the apostrophe. Next: you know about the space between ‘each others’; but did you know that ‘other’s’ is possessive so another apostrophe. Next: ‘when’ should be capitalized and start a new line. Lastly: I would cut that last line into two, but that is up to you. Now your poem is indeed a great poem and should go in the archives of one of the greatest poems of all time. Adeline

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Ashraful Musaddeq 17 October 2008

Cute and lovely love poem. 10 for this.

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Sarwar Chowdhury 13 October 2008

Lovely expressions! .............10

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