Lines That Separate Comments

'Terribly dead' is brilliant. The lines that separate are a brilliant metaphor for the mind going off the rails - either in a dream or in a moment of irrationality. Thank god your inner child has thus far kept you safe. A fascinating piece that helps the reader understand. love, Allie xxxx

Jerry, the poetic vision (as encapsulated in the last two lines) is also terribly good! Rgds, Ivan