My Forever Poem by Brittany Graviet

My Forever

Rating: 4.6


As silent as the sun,
I await your awakening.
Seeing you sleep,
Is how I'd have imagined
Heaven in my head

Your lips are parted lovely,
Your eyes seem hidden endless.
Knowing of your knowledge,
I wonder at your wishes,
Of happiness in Hell.

For Hell has not been home-ish
but still I have stayed
For family is forever
My love, my lamb
My forever is for our family.

Tuesday, September 9, 2008
Topic(s) of this poem: family
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Elizabeth England 09 September 2008

nicely written keep up the good work! :)

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Jhonny Thermidor 14 September 2008

U put ur thought so well to express what u feel deep inside. It is good to make a differences in life and this is what u did: U created differences. I really enjoy this one!

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Maria Isabel Oropeza 10 September 2008

although this may not be one of your best poems, it is a well written one with good delivery and message. although you did not protray who your poem was for, i will excuse the confusion, for i truly enjoyed this poem. Be Different. Be You. Elizabeth

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Ency Bearis 09 September 2008

another good concept...with good deliverance..nicely penned... Ency Bearis

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Greenwolfe 1962 09 September 2008

I gave this one an 8 as well. I found merit in the purpose and meaning. The creativity was there as well. THere is much to be proud of. I am not quite sure it is written as well or presented as it snhould have been, but those are advanced minor things at this point. GW62

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Stacey Watts 09 September 2008

Another beautiful poem. I like the way this one is written.

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