Ocean Blue Poem by Veronica T. C.

Ocean Blue

Rating: 3.0


Put all of your feelings in a bottle
Throw it in the ocean and
Watch it sail away
In the ocean blue
And watch all your problems just float away

Wednesday, July 29, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: feelings,lifestyle,ocean
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
So sorry for the misunderstanding of the last line I removed it.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kim Barney 17 August 2015

I liked this a lot, until I got to the very last line, and then it didn't seem to fit. For me, this works better as a five-line poem (without that last line) . One other thing, there is a typo in the second line. Shouldn't that be Throw it in the ocean... ?

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Akhtar Jawad 29 July 2015

A nice idea, liked it.............................

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Aranthabailu Ummar 29 July 2015

Eventhou it shows a small prose it have big solution to our problems sea do not know what we have filled in it. But it carries all in a same manner So you are the great to show that all the problems can handle easily

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