Wednesday, July 29, 2015

Ocean Blue Comments

Rating: 3.0

Put all of your feelings in a bottle
Throw it in the ocean and
Watch it sail away
In the ocean blue
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Veronica T. C.
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Kim Barney 17 August 2015

I liked this a lot, until I got to the very last line, and then it didn't seem to fit. For me, this works better as a five-line poem (without that last line) . One other thing, there is a typo in the second line. Shouldn't that be Throw it in the ocean... ?

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Akhtar Jawad 29 July 2015

A nice idea, liked it.............................

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Aranthabailu Ummar 29 July 2015

Eventhou it shows a small prose it have big solution to our problems sea do not know what we have filled in it. But it carries all in a same manner So you are the great to show that all the problems can handle easily

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Veronica T. C.

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