Ode To Gardners Poem by Carolyn Brunelle

Ode To Gardners

Rating: 4.5


Plants and flowers,
Shrubs and trees
Warmed by the sunshine,
Kissed by the bees.
Ever growing;
Ever green.
Sweetest blooms
We’ve ever seen
Arrive in Spring
With each new breeze;
And dropp us faithfully
To our knees.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Michael Pruchnicki 02 April 2008

Carolyn - nice work on Ode to Gardeners! One suggestion - use the active instead of passive voice Dropping us faithfully To our knees.................passive We dropp faithfully To our knees................active Just a thought! Usually the active indicates action, doing something Perhaps though you are overcome by the breeze and brought to your knees by its emotional power?

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