On Certain Summer Nights, Comments

Yep, melancholic and gently sad. Sweet little read. Warm regards, Gina.

Vincent, you've painted a beautiful, melancholy canvas here, that's both personal and pensive. The alliteration is subtle and works here; I want to flow into it, but the one thing stopping me is the inconsistent rhyme pattern (nights/sights, sky, why, then following lines not rhyming) . I'm not sure if it was intentional, and maybe it's a form I'm not familiar with, but I would love to see a version without the rhyme. Just my thoughts. Take care, Lori