elysabeth faslund

Rookie (11/23/49 / Thibodaux. Louisiana)

Origin Of The Flame...1* - Poem by elysabeth faslund

I woke with words tangled
Under my nails,
As blood beneath
Dragon scales...during
The kill.

Something, someone...
They are the same...
Will stop breathing
By nails, words, blood,
But grieve nonetheless,

For one who swallows these
Words, not their
Meaning.
Or, meaning misread,
Leans on it's
Knife.

A scorpion lays sleeping
Under the Dragon.
Who will move first...
At what cost?


Accepted for publication by Orbis Journal, England,8-21-07. Today.
Will appear in their Fall issue.


Comments about Origin Of The Flame...1* by elysabeth faslund

  • (12/12/2007 11:26:00 AM)

    I woke with words tangled
    Under my nails,

    Your choice of words and images are very artful and meaningful. The beginning of your poems certainly catch one's attention.
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  • (9/8/2007 8:02:00 PM)

    Your first line is brilliant, drawing the reader into your tale of dragons and drama and magical jabberwocky imaginings. Looking forward to the next in the series. love, Allie xxxx (Report) Reply

  • (9/4/2007 8:21:00 PM)

    Similar to your 4th one, is it not? I wonder what provoked you to write this series. very foreboding, graphic. (Report) Reply

  • (7/30/2007 12:55:00 AM)

    Sensational! A feast of mythic images. You leave so much for the reader to do - placing great trust in the reader's willingness and power to imagine all the rest. (Report) Reply

  • (7/8/2007 6:58:00 PM)

    Elysabeth, I love reading your poems like this because they challenge my imagination and hopefully expand it. There is so much meaning in what you say that it takes me a while to dig it out. I don't quite succeed all the time. Even the title is mystifying. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, June 15, 2007

Poem Edited: Saturday, March 12, 2011


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