elysabeth faslund

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A Woman Says 'Talk Dirty To Me'...(Humor) * - Poem by elysabeth faslund

A woman runs around the house all day
Thinking 'This night, I'll play,
I'll tickle his fancy when he gets home.
After all, I've cleaned, cooked, all alone.'

Then through the door her man appears
With bundles of flowers, a case of beer,
His caseload of work, and smiling still!
The woman is happy! Steaks on the grill! !

They dine with candles alight,
He pats her ass, whispers, 'Tonight.'
She's bought a naughty at a store.
Slithers into bed and hears the snore!

Slithers out of bed, smashes a plate
Loud enough to begin a debate.
He stumbles, grumbles into the room
Where his love is flying a broom.

'What's THAT all about, what's the matter? '
As another plate flies at his head to shatter,
She spits, 'I'm going home to Mother! '
'You ARE your mother, doen't even bother.'

Comments about A Woman Says 'Talk Dirty To Me'...(Humor) * by elysabeth faslund

  • Chinedu Dike (2/5/2018 7:23:00 PM)

    An insightful piece of poetry set aside for sober reflection. I appreciate the rhyme of profundity and reality. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

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  • K. V. Venkataramana (9/15/2016 4:53:00 AM)

    The poem is mystifying and leads one to a different world of thoughts. (Report) Reply

  • Captain Herbert Poetry (6/20/2015 5:05:00 AM)

    a very interesting to read. Superb write (Report) Reply

  • Akhtar Jawad (1/5/2015 10:11:00 AM)

    Enjoyed and then started thinking, it's meaningful as well. (Report) Reply

  • (1/2/2015 8:01:00 PM)

    Very good, it tells a story and has a beginning middle and end well done you (Report) Reply

  • (5/9/2008 1:06:00 AM)

    That's just way too funny. I'm glad I found you. (Report) Reply

  • (12/5/2007 3:03:00 PM)

    Scores a 10 for the humor. Unfortunately I have to be hit between the eyes sometimes to get the message. (Report) Reply

  • (10/21/2007 9:08:00 AM)

    Oh, this has me rolling around.... so true and yet so characatured (I guess characatures, like cliches, are there for a reason) .... guess who I won't be showing this to! :) t x (Report) Reply

  • (10/17/2007 6:12:00 AM)

    I've enjoyed reading a number of your poems, but this one is absolutely tops for me. Written with economy and assurance, lovely images, superb pacing, gusto, and perhaps even a hint of compassion lurking behind the tough-minded farce. Nothing belabored, yet crystal clear. Neither hard nor soft on your characters. Perfect pitch on the humor of the situation. The final two stanzas are awesome. Plus the poem resonates (at least with me) far beyond the situation you describe so well.

    I've come back to Talk Dirty a couple of times, and each time I'm impressed. If you haven't entered this in contests or had it published, you should. This is one to be proud of. I don't often comment on others' poetry, but I felt I needed to on this one. Thanks!
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  • (9/9/2007 1:11:00 AM)

    You've been peeping outside my window! ! !
    OMG do I relate to this one. Scary. lol
    Hilarious fun, loving the ending... you're fantastic!
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  • (9/2/2007 10:02:00 AM)

    LOL LOL LOL great write! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • (8/27/2007 2:48:00 PM)

    the lesson is to always save room for dessert! your marriage may depend on enjoying it together... -chuck (Report) Reply

  • (7/12/2007 4:09:00 AM)

    So clever and true. Their respective hard days culminate into the essential differences of sex. Perhaps he should have stayed out, or she shouldn't have bothered. Last stanza's a killer. A poetic touch that expresses a bitter reality. S x (Report) Reply

  • (6/30/2007 8:45:00 AM)

    Man! this is really deep....Apparently the creativity of a person with an avalanche experience eqittable to any major in the field of literary works! ! ...Herkym! (Report) Reply

  • (6/18/2007 12:17:00 AM)

    This is very creative and cleverly written. It's sad, but funny too! (Report) Reply

  • (6/13/2007 6:59:00 AM)

    Now this is one witty male. This sort of repartee is usually only thought of after the event. So cruel, and yet, sadly, so true. A cleverly written, tongue in cheek piece about a wife whose expectations were set just too high. You pen comedy very well, Elysabeth. love, Allie xxxx (Report) Reply

  • (6/8/2007 1:49:00 PM)

    Ha! Ha! Ha! This was a real good but true one in life! It made me laugh inside.
    It's true you know? Just look at a woman b'for ya marry her and then look at her mama and you'll see what your future wife will look like in say-ten to fifteen to twenty years down the road. They enevitibly turn out the very same as a spitting younger image. I don't know if that will be a good thing or not? But if her mom is fat you can very well be sure that after the marriage the new wife will feel safe after awhile to let herself go to pot so to speak!
    God bless all poets-thin or fat-MJG.
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  • (6/6/2007 9:09:00 AM)

    How I know this one...My dad always said to look at the mother...and at the time she didn't look half bad...lol (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, June 5, 2007

Poem Edited: Tuesday, March 8, 2011

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